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Brains over Brawn
July 28, 2021|Short Story

Brains over Brawn

Brains over Brawn

After taking a piece of cake into her mouth. Mary enjoyed the flavors watering her mouth, and she closed her eyes for an instant.

“…and I’m dating a twenty-two-year-old now,” Gwen said.

The three friends paused.

“What!” Mary said, surprised.

“You’re dating a boy!” Victoria exclaimed.

“It’s not that bad,” Gwen said. “He is about to finish college.”

“Ha ha ha”, the three friends couldn’t control themselves and started laughing.

“Well,” Victoria said. “What is this all about?”

“This guy,” Gwen said, “has something that drives me crazy.”

“Sure…” said Mary. “Aren’t you a little old for that?”

“I know,” Gwen said. “But, I feel good when he’s around. It’s different.”

“What do you mean?” Victoria asked.

“It’s like achieving that impossible love that I always wanted,” Gwen said, tilting her head to the side and smiling. “He makes me happy.”

“Congratulate him for me,” said Mary. “I hope you continue having that enthusiasm when you have to change his diaper.”

“I also thought he was going to bore me,” Gwen confessed. “That’s why I was afraid to tell you, but we’ve been dating for two months now.”

Victoria looked at Gwen. “You kept it from us?”

“Could I help you ladies with anything?” asked a waiter.

“If we need something we’ll let you know,” Mary said.

“I’ll be around,” said the waiter. “Excuse me.”

“On second thought,” Mary said. “I wouldn’t mind having one like him.”

Gwen looked down. “That’s Jason, my boyfriend.”

“It can’t be,” said Mary.

“OMG…” said Victoria.

“I know,” Gwen said. “I’m the worst.”

“But he’s hot,” Mary added.

“I imagine you’ve read the latest genetic studies,” Gwen said.

“Not at all,” Victoria said.

“It turns out that men can only pass on three-quarters of their genes to their offspring…in other words, only women can pass down intelligence to their children,” Gwen said.

“How is that?” Victoria asked, somewhat confused.

“I was surprised,” said Gwen. “Studies have shown that men cannot pass on their intellectual capacity to their children.

“In other words, we should be looking for other attributes in men.”

“Like Jason’s legs,” Mary said.

“Stop it,” Gwen said. “He is watching us.”

The three friends laughed.

“It’s about time we put a stop to toxic masculinity,” Mary said. “I might also want to date younger men without fear of being judged.”

“It’s in our hands to break the patriarchal traditions,” Gwen said.

“Women should be able to choose whom to date,” Victoria said.

“I’m going to give it a try,” Mary said. “I have the perfect candidate.”

“Let’s toast to that.”


Sebastian Iturralde

I am a fiction blogger and lover of literature, art, and all things creative. As a citizen of this beautiful planet, I am constantly inspired by the natural world around me.


  • July 28, 2021 at 2:49 pm

    Be careful who you date… !

  • July 28, 2021 at 3:02 pm

    Great information.I can quickly refer to it and show others. Also, glad to know that we
    are doing some of this stuff on our own blog.

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  • July 28, 2021 at 3:05 pm

    Thoroughly enjoyed the female perspective. Nice dialogue carrying a strong message!

    • October 8, 2021 at 8:41 pm

      Re Brains over Brawn
      the genetics bit is inventive, suiting the story
      And may women prevail in breaking down patriarchal traditions

  • July 28, 2021 at 4:38 pm

    I enjoy your writing! Keep at it!

  • July 28, 2021 at 5:15 pm

    Hey did you really write that or were you listening in?

  • July 28, 2021 at 5:38 pm

    Now I know what women feel when men eye them… without considering they have a brain…

  • July 28, 2021 at 5:57 pm

    I prefer someone way older… thinking 60ish… I think we would have a lot of fun 😄 😉

  • July 28, 2021 at 6:02 pm


  • July 28, 2021 at 6:10 pm

    You are talented to be able to write from the female vantage. I struggle with male characters. My characters tend to talk a lot and do girlie things, whereas I know the men in my stories would not say anything in real life. When my stepdad is upset, for example, he paces the floor, doesn’t yell in domestic arguments. When he is mad, he avoids whoever made him that way. It’s difficult to write a character like that.

    “Go to the basement,” the man said.
    I went.
    Right before I’d told him I punched my fist through the wall. The cheap material cracked all the way to the television on the other side, unable to handle my assault. A giant hole stared back at me.
    The man paced above me, “We should let her, you know.” He was referring to playing soccer. I would have only had one year left in soccer. I wouldn’t have made it to the varsity level, but dammit, I wanted to play.
    The man paced above me.
    “She needs a job,” the woman said. She started to ramble.
    The man paced above me.

    What was he thinking?

    That’s about as close as I get to writing a male character, an adult male character.

  • July 28, 2021 at 6:21 pm

    Good post.

  • July 28, 2021 at 6:59 pm

    I used the WP app. Sorry but it was a bit long, I emailed you a reply.

  • July 28, 2021 at 7:48 pm

    I like Sebastian how you introduce yourself as citizen not of any country on this planet, but the planet Earth. 🙂 Every time I look at your blog there is always something creative is written by you. I fully agree with you on creative energy is coming from within the nature ( I imagine you are meaning creative energy inside of us, because we are part of the nature).
    Just wondering do you like photography?
    I really enjoyed the piece about the ladies and the specially character Mary who ate the cake.

    • August 21, 2021 at 11:17 pm

      yes, creative energy does come from nature…and from people who are connected to nature

  • July 28, 2021 at 8:37 pm

    It’s rare to find male writers who understand women so well and accept them the way they are. Indeed, why should boys have all the fun? Loved your story.

  • July 28, 2021 at 10:43 pm

    That….was….uncanny in your perception of the way women react when you tell them you’re interested in a younger man, speaking from experience 😆. Who cares what they think. Time isnt linear and age is just a number. Bravo. 💗 Id love to know who Mary has in mind… 🤔

  • July 28, 2021 at 11:04 pm

    So the truth is out! Women’s gossip’s about male attributes do not differ much from those of men, but in contrast to the male species, they are just more focused on what really counts!

  • July 28, 2021 at 11:29 pm


  • July 29, 2021 at 2:51 am

    Oh wow, I’m liking this story a lot. If I were single, I’d probably date someone younger too. Hehe

  • July 29, 2021 at 3:44 am

    A new “Sex in the City” is on the horizon. This was an amusing read, especially about the genes.

  • July 29, 2021 at 4:56 am

    Wow, I have to say, I’ve recently began writing. You write women So well. I honestly struggled with my female lead character, She never felt authentic. I see the comments from other ladies attesting to this as well. Is this something that can be learned? HAHA I feel silly asking such a question, but It still needed to be asked. Thanks!~

  • July 29, 2021 at 5:39 am

    Good story. However set it up in the beginning that there are 3 mature women. Watch out for the squinting modifiers in the first sentence. You did a lot of telling, which is very good. Just take more time in creating your story, in other words rewrite. The only writer who gets away with a half told tale is Joyce Carol Oates. I prefer Stephen King’s On Writing. The best book on writing I’ve ever read or listened to on CD.

    Your story is very good. Just needs a little work and excellent results will be the outcome.

    • July 29, 2021 at 6:02 am

      Yeah, King’s book is great, I learned a great deal. Good on you for putting in some constructive criticism. We can not grow as artists without reflecting on our work, and doing so positively is always a good thing.

  • July 29, 2021 at 8:53 am


  • July 29, 2021 at 9:10 am

    You’re such a great writer!

  • Sharon Randle
    July 29, 2021 at 10:51 am

    Your writing inspires my creative writing to keep going! Thank you for great content!

  • July 29, 2021 at 11:45 am

    Cheers to our choices! I was laughing while reading this. I can relate with the ladies. very crisp.

  • Uthman Oriyomi Abdullahi
    July 29, 2021 at 11:56 am

    Well informative, writing from a female Perspectives, great work

  • July 29, 2021 at 3:46 pm

    It’s a nice job. Moving your piece from conservative to liberated premise.

  • July 29, 2021 at 4:00 pm

    Very convincing logic. Will begin new tactics of searching for suitable mates only considering 3/4 of their personality and physical attributes-let that 1/4 slide for science’s sake. Standards just revised. Fun eaves-dropping read. Wish we got just a tiny taste of this younger boyfriend’s physique, though.

  • July 29, 2021 at 6:21 pm

    WOW! Truth!

  • July 30, 2021 at 12:06 am

    Thanks for your like

  • July 30, 2021 at 12:31 am

    A lovely story. 😊

  • July 30, 2021 at 7:47 pm

    I loved it! 🙂 🙂 Have a great weekend!

  • July 30, 2021 at 8:25 pm

    I love this!!

  • July 31, 2021 at 1:43 am

    Good posts

  • July 31, 2021 at 8:36 am

    Excellent writing 👌

  • July 31, 2021 at 11:32 am

    Beautiful analysis & awareness of the new energy female..love your work..by the my partner,s name is Mary..she must read this .lol.. blessings GG🤔🤪🌹💞

  • go
    July 31, 2021 at 1:47 pm

    What do we talk about in our private groups? My friends talk about the doctor shortage and recent operations and who passed away recently. Your private group conversations reflect your preoccupations, no?

  • July 31, 2021 at 7:34 pm

    It’s different when you’re a 67 year old man on Social Security and much younger women talk “age doesn’t matter, love is from the heart”. As I go along with the talk of their talk, patiently awaiting the the casting of the hook, I get some sob story and “can you help me with…$$$…”. I can only laugh! So much for social media. Then it’s even more of a laugh when the emojis with tears gushing from their eyes come pouring in. It’s so much fun saying,”I wasn’t born yesterday, been around the block more than a few times. LOLGB+

  • July 31, 2021 at 8:30 pm

    Amazing read my friend! I finally have time to sit and appreciate your writings. You’re really good at this!
    God bless you always and thank you for your amazing support!

  • August 1, 2021 at 2:07 am

    As a woman, I loved this piece! I’m very curious to know, is it really true that children inherit their intellectual capacity from the mother and not the father? Fascinating thought! Especially considering that, to the ancients, the child’s whole being was considered to be encapsulated in the father’s sperm, with the mother merely being an “oven”, so to speak, for the baby to grow in.
    Anyways, been wanting to leave a comment here for a while, as i’ve thoroughly enjoyed your writing 🙂 thanks Sebastian, and keep coming with the stories!

  • August 1, 2021 at 7:12 am

    This is so informative! And creative too

  • spiritualheali
    August 1, 2021 at 2:43 pm

    Weldom bro

  • August 1, 2021 at 5:30 pm

    Good lord that woman is out of control lol

  • August 2, 2021 at 12:05 am

    Interestingly put together!

    Maybe, introspecting on why Gwen is so taken in by Jason could give a little more depth to this piece. Is it just the physical attribute? The thrill of doing something unprecedented in her life? Or just the freshness of love….

    What is it about him or the relation that makes her happy? Is it her being uninhibited or her being desired by someone so youger? One perspective can free her, the other can cage her.

  • August 2, 2021 at 4:26 am

    Great post
    Stay wealthy healthy safe and happy

  • August 2, 2021 at 6:09 pm


  • August 3, 2021 at 3:40 am

    haha… I just broke up from my 22 years younger bf, we dated 3 months then…haha

  • August 3, 2021 at 11:35 am

    I liked it. Three of my cousins are a little younger than their wives. And another cousin is a little older than her husband.

  • August 3, 2021 at 8:38 pm

    Interesting read. Loved it!

  • August 4, 2021 at 2:17 am

    ha love it! Thanks

  • August 4, 2021 at 6:06 am

    I feel very much like Alice who has just entered a rabbit hole when I come into your world of imagination.

    I do love words… but I especially love men who know how to use words well.

    You recently have liked a couple of my posts. Thank you…. But I know that you know that it is most likely not because you actually enjoy my writing.

    I have a perception about you, and I sense what you are looking for…

  • August 4, 2021 at 10:11 am

    thanks for showing love to my blog sebastian. please let me know what youd like me to post about in future. youre a master of micro fiction and visual presentation

  • August 6, 2021 at 9:17 am

    I guess sometime ladies sometime need someone to pampered which sometime men can’t understand or too matured for. Thanks for the story. I hope I will try read more on the other, but my list is quite long. Thanks thanks.

  • CGI 21
    August 6, 2021 at 2:31 pm

    Thanks again for this story too. It is brilliant. Can’t believe how much it helped me!

  • August 9, 2021 at 12:25 pm

    Great story. Jillian

  • August 10, 2021 at 9:26 am

    I love this story. I love reading them.

  • August 10, 2021 at 1:25 pm

    I enjoyed reading this. You are very talented. A bit lighter than some of your other work . It made me smile.

  • August 11, 2021 at 5:16 am

    only women can pass down intelligence to their children. I didn’t know this if it’s true and I’m so happy for myself because I was wishing to be like my mom not my dad :))

  • August 12, 2021 at 6:41 pm

    Good counteract to the chauvinism that men often portray.

  • August 12, 2021 at 9:22 pm

    I enjoyed reading what you wrote, Sebastian! Keep up the good work! Being a woman, I would not look to younger men as mates. I have been a single adult, though. My husband and I do get along well with adults who are the ages of some of our grown children, though! ha ha We are young at heart!

  • August 13, 2021 at 11:59 am

    That’s funny, i liked that!
    Thank you for the story.

  • August 16, 2021 at 8:52 am

    Interesting use of dialogue. I felt Like I could associate with all different characters in the story. I am kind of new to this experience and I think that’s a skill that I would love to learn from you.
    Then of course the ability to write from the lady’s POV… Just love it.

  • Roberta Dennis
    August 16, 2021 at 11:39 am

    Thank you for your support. I hope this BIBLE STUDY is helping you grow in your Faith as it helping me to grow stronger in my Faith and Trust In THE LORD. GOD BLESS You.

  • August 17, 2021 at 11:22 pm

    This is great. Marrying for power or intelligence may create children who are less intelligent and highly entitled.

  • August 19, 2021 at 5:11 am

    Love this. You are obviously an Author who breaks boundaries and doesn’t worry what other people think. Definitely my kind of Author.

  • Dr Robert Culbard
    August 20, 2021 at 1:23 pm

    Very impressive concept, expertly dcelivered.

  • August 21, 2021 at 3:03 pm

    This is so good. Dialog that is expository, original and authentic is rare indeed. And a blow against the patriarchy and stereotypes of women. Cutting, witty, believable, catty…maybe true. Thanks for liking my blog posts. I’ll want to read more of your posts now.

  • August 23, 2021 at 10:58 am

    Sab, just paid a visit, welldone

  • August 23, 2021 at 12:42 pm

    It was pretty good.

  • Roberta Dennis
    August 24, 2021 at 10:41 am

    Thank you for your support.

  • August 25, 2021 at 12:02 pm

    Funny! I really liked this one – the girl talk – haaha – you captured it well! We’re you listening over someone’s shoulder? hhaahaa

  • August 27, 2021 at 10:42 pm

    Your blog was awesome!

  • August 28, 2021 at 3:35 am

    dating scene has changed age is one of the things that people dont care about anymore…love it

  • August 30, 2021 at 4:20 am

    Dear Sebastian, The wry ironic humor makes the story an interesting read.

  • August 30, 2021 at 12:07 pm

    This is delightful. Really enjoyed it.

  • Dr. John Persico Jr.
    September 6, 2021 at 11:48 am

    Great story. Interesting how we all seem to have stereotypes for one thing or another.

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  • September 7, 2021 at 2:15 pm

    hello? am doing online academic writing can you help me fine some clients please?

  • September 12, 2021 at 1:15 pm

    Nurture nature and never neglect the nuanced notion that no one has nothing noncontributory nor nonessential.


  • September 13, 2021 at 3:32 pm

    Your blog is very interesting Sebastian! Thank you for following AmericaOnCoffee, therushhour.net.

  • Sierra
    September 15, 2021 at 8:56 am

    Great writing.

  • September 23, 2021 at 6:07 pm

    This story is awesome, dude! Thank-you. I hope, in real world, men & women can get along.

  • October 2, 2021 at 12:29 pm


  • November 9, 2021 at 2:10 pm

    Good for women if they realize they can change the ‘norm’!
    Chances are older women can please a man better than younger women.
    Life’s short—seize the day—make the most of it if there are no repercussions.

  • Nana
    November 18, 2021 at 3:22 pm

    Well, what if was true that men only provide this much in their genes? What if children inherited only their mothers’ brains their fathers’ physique?

    • November 19, 2021 at 10:12 am

      Then, we have been looking at beauty from the wrong perspective.

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