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Devil’s Trap
August 4, 2021|Short Story

Devil’s Trap

Devil’s Trap

Darkness is that place where the light no longer reaches. After an eternity, its inhabitants became accustomed to impiety and began to distinguish the beauty within the abyss.

They could easily find their leader near them—the last likeness of bright light. A memory of the lives they left behind. Enough for many, while others cannot even remember a moment before dark.

The cost of their freedom is ignored, while the fallen enjoy a life they have otherwise never imagined.

Some…others cannot enjoy the pleasures without regrets. They prefer to look for someone to blame for their misfortunes. Fear of judgment makes them unwilling to find a way out of the dark.

Their leader, the one who shared the fruit of knowledge—he is not like the rest of us. It’s known that he is a refined man; good taste and money always seem to accompany him..

Most look at him with envy or guilt, but all think of him with contempt. Life cannot be pleasant for a being who is despised even by his closest subjects. Despite that, we always see him with a smile.

The darkness has become too comfortable. Sometimes I feel as happy as Lucifer himself, but no matter how hard I try, there is no way to understand his game.

Its driving force is strange and incoherent. We can see the light of him traveling through the darkness and everyone, even those who hate him, offer the prince of darkness their sacrifices.

There might be light outside the cavern. That idea is implausible, but for some reason…it’s the only thing that keeps me sane. My only chance is to escape the darkness. Although I forgot the cause of my conviction, how long it will last or if it is just my imagination.

I used to enjoy suffering. Something changed. I feel like my eyes are finally opening. There must be a way to escape from this place…if only…it would be insane. No one can stand in Lucifer’s way. But maybe. I must try.

I haven’t figured it out. My attempts have probably failed because he can hear my thoughts. I must train to silence my mind. Taking him by surprise could help me end his life. It may be useless. What else can I do?

His light is so beautiful. I can’t understand my fascination when I see it. There is so much that I can learn of it. I could shine like him. Like I did so long ago. Sure, it was only for an instant, but I know it was real.

There must be something beyond this jail. I have to find a way to escape from it. I’m sure that the fruit of knowledge is still within me. If I could open myself up and reach Eden’s fruit. If I had the courage to do it, but I can’t. I’m weak.

At least one of us was able to escape. He died? I have the feeling that dying is not enough. I need to get out of here alive. Like Jesus did.

Why would he leave without us?

He didn’t even leave us a clue. How are we supposed to follow him? Sure…everyone around Lucifer is eager to teach us the path. Those are all lies. How could I trust the jailers? There must be a way. I have to kill him. Ending his life may not accomplish anything, but it will give me pleasure.

Knowing that the cause of my…stop, you can’t let those ideas flourish. Blaming others will not help me find the answer. I don’t even know if it is possible to escape.

I should work on my light before facing him. It would be crazy to believe that I’m capable of defeating him. What else can I do?

Live like the rest. Trying to enjoy the darkness as if I had no memory of the grace of the light. But now that I think about it, it could all be the fruit of my imagination.

I will have to work hard to achieve this goal…ridiculous! Lucifer doesn’t have to work hard to dominate us. Why did I have to accept his gift? I’m so weak.

I’d better get back to my routine before raising suspicions.

“Could you get me a whiskey?”

The bartender seems happy. I should be happy too. Does he know about Lucifer?

Everyone here must have had a visit from him. It can’t be that I’m the only one the prince of darkness decided to visit. There is nothing special about me.

“Here you go,” said the bartender.

Hope this is enough to forget. Jake thought, raising his glass to drink. Forget his face…forget the tone of his voice and how the world seemed to shake with his words…forget the fear I felt when I saw him in front of me…forget the sound of his cane hitting the ground and how surprising it was to see him appear.

“Stop!” said the devil. “Stop what you’re doing.”

But…what did he mean by that? He knew that I was looking for a way out. He may be able to read my mind. Maybe he just wanted to scare me. I wish I could forget his face. That way I could stop finding him in the eyes of others. Maybe, he is everywhere.

Was that the same sparkle in the bartender’s eyes? There is no other explanation. I hoped to see you again. Listen to my thoughts all you want. You won’t be able to keep me trapped for long.

With that, Jake leapt onto the bar and smashed the empty glass on the bartender’s face. Then he grabbed a bottle and started beating the man on the head.

“Let me get out of here, Satan.”

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Sebastian Iturralde

I am a fiction blogger and lover of literature, art, and all things creative. As a citizen of this beautiful planet, I am constantly inspired by the natural world around me.

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  • August 4, 2021 at 8:32 am

    ♤The cost of their freedom is ignored♤

    Sadly so, many truly don’t know the price of freedom

  • August 4, 2021 at 8:35 am

    Very powerful.

  • August 4, 2021 at 8:35 am

    ♤Some…others cannot enjoy the pleasures without regrets. They prefer to look for someone to blame for their misfortunes. Fear of judgment makes them unwilling to find a way out of the dark.♤

    It’s terrible to live life so terribly fearful and not allow the old layers to melt. Inside there is something…but how we fear the light and break the mold.

  • August 4, 2021 at 9:06 am

    Enlightening !!

  • August 4, 2021 at 10:23 am

    Wonderful and we’ll said. Apostle Joseph Michaels

  • Harold Robert Rubin
    August 4, 2021 at 10:36 am

    So far as I understand Scriptures, Lucifer cannot read your mind/ hear your thoughts. Your depth and love for Christ are expressed beautifully here. Thank you.

  • August 4, 2021 at 10:36 am

    Wow. Fascinating.

  • August 4, 2021 at 10:47 am

    Those in the light do not understand those who are “accustomed to” or have been in the dark, it is like trying to explain to a blind person from birth what colour is…

    To a person in the dark, any other light but candlelight would hurt my eyes. Because we are simply not used to it.

  • August 4, 2021 at 11:27 am

    I didn’t know where this was going. Captivating!

  • August 4, 2021 at 11:45 am

    Great story. Leaves me longing for sunlight.

  • elcieloyelinfierno
    August 4, 2021 at 11:46 am

    Genial narrativa que lleva al lector a adentrarse en un mundo a la vez oscuro y mágico. Cada dia mejoras…y tienes mucho mas que dar. Un abrazo.

  • August 4, 2021 at 1:37 pm

    That “Devil’s Trap” was really great. U think I get stuck there often.

  • August 4, 2021 at 2:01 pm

    There is nowhere where Christ doesn’t shine his light, even in Hell. Remember he descended into Hell and on the third day he rose again according to the Scriptures. Hell is of our own making when we mire in our own degradation. We turn our back on God, but he is always present. We just need to turn around to see and feel the warmth of his light. Jesus is your armor and he cannot be defeated.

  • August 4, 2021 at 2:27 pm

    Satan has no light… he’s a parasite…

  • Levi
    August 4, 2021 at 2:35 pm

    Psalm 102:13 ~ a set time 🌬️

  • August 4, 2021 at 3:14 pm

    Wow, powerful and thought provoking all at once. Makes one want to avoid such a trap at all costs.

  • Terry Taylor
    August 4, 2021 at 4:44 pm

    Love your perspective. Delightful closing.

  • August 4, 2021 at 5:05 pm

    You got me, I wasn’t sure where you were going. Nicely done.

  • August 4, 2021 at 6:42 pm

    Never a dull moment in your stories 👍😁

  • August 4, 2021 at 7:06 pm

    I have had to reread your short story several times it is so deep and I wanted to comment further. I too have seen Eden. It was when I visited a farm on Mont (Mountain) Road. It was an incredibly spiritual experience and I had never seen a valley so breathtaking beautiful. Years ago after a snowstorm I experienced three days of heaven on earth the sky was an azure blue and there was no sin, death or illness. I have never forgotten that experience even though I have experienced spiritual attacks and know what evil is capable of, but God never allows evil to hold my mind captive. He shows me these visions for a reason. I know we are on a verge of a spiritual awakening and transformation because I have felt the consciousness of God within others gathering and I know God will finish it. So never feel it is all on you to face Satan because it isn’t. But know when we follow our heart with love and the inner voice of God within, peace will abound and he will fulfill his promises. God will lift the veil and we will know Eden or Heaven on Earth. You are not alone.

    • August 9, 2021 at 12:20 am

      Do you believe in faith on God and any other spiritual experience you have faced.

  • August 4, 2021 at 7:50 pm

    Interesting take on the all encompassing, suffocating power of Evil, Satan, Lucifer, the Devil….whatever name with which we label the Darkness. I remember in the movie
    “Bram Stoker’s Dracula”, The Doctor was called in and he immediately recognized that the young girl was possessed and that he would have to do an exorcism. That meant using the articles of Christian faith to extoll the Devil, and took a lot of energy over multiple times. He never was successful.
    Right now, in our world, in the reality here in the 21st century, we are truly experiencing the ethereal presence all around us of a profound incipient Evil which religious folks acknowledge as the full on Biblical Devil. I don’t know about you, but I have never felt the presence more powerfully than in the last eighteen months. I can see the Darkness shining in the eyes of many men and women who are consumed by the energy of Pure Evil. “the same sparkle in the bartender’s eyes” Yes, we can truly see in the eyes which are the doorway to the soul. And in the case of Satan, that soul is complete unescapable Darkness. It can only be diffused and thwarted completely by shining the Bright Light upon it.
    Very interesting glimmer into the quandary of Good vs Evil and the human struggle we fight hourly, daily.

  • August 4, 2021 at 7:50 pm

    Good story. The internal monologue is very interesting. The Bible is an excellent source of science fiction. Your story reminds me of Revelation 12 where “war broke out in heaven.” A rewrite will bring it up to snuff.

  • August 4, 2021 at 8:04 pm

    A well set scenery of the dark site of the psyche, the struggle between ego and self.

  • August 4, 2021 at 8:18 pm

    Very interesting with powerful imagery

  • August 4, 2021 at 9:14 pm

    Deep!

  • August 5, 2021 at 1:32 am

    Amazing

  • August 5, 2021 at 6:19 am

    Darkness is where the light stopped reaching. Walk in the Light, Jesus and leave the darkness confused.

  • Luz
    August 5, 2021 at 8:29 am

    Very interesting reading. If only we can realize that all we need to do is call on Jesus!

  • August 5, 2021 at 8:39 am

    Such powerful writing. Thought provoking and well written. We all do need to think deeper that what appears to us on the surface.

  • August 5, 2021 at 9:37 am

    Awesome !!

  • August 5, 2021 at 10:26 am

    Your short story is as dark as the this page’s wallpaper… threatening as heavy footsteps in the hall… Lonely as a heartsick teen…

    You have a beguiling imagination… In fiction, the use of metaphore, simile, and description helps your writing match your inventiveness. You want to craft paragraphs that tease… leaving the reader longing for more like a prisoner on half rations.

    I like your nerve and that you write in two languages. No pare… sigue,sigue.

  • August 5, 2021 at 11:31 am

    hey great post.

  • August 5, 2021 at 7:36 pm

    Powerful and thought-provoking…

  • Jason Lane
    August 5, 2021 at 9:28 pm

    This is powerful! And it shows that creativity and ideas do visit multiple people at the same time. Just to think, tonight I wrote about a similar topic, albeit an actual occurrence in my life. Really enjoyed reading your post!

  • August 5, 2021 at 9:32 pm

    Powerful Conversations of hope in the midst of darkness and evil. If one can free themselves in their minds first, then maybe hope is possible.

  • August 5, 2021 at 10:26 pm

    This is great. Powerful!

  • August 6, 2021 at 12:56 am

    Interesting..

  • August 6, 2021 at 2:36 pm

    Such a great story. I love it.

  • August 7, 2021 at 4:15 am

    Amazing dude keep it up 😀

  • August 8, 2021 at 12:03 am

    I patiently await more

  • August 8, 2021 at 7:28 am

    Well wriiten.. You got me well…Superb work

  • August 8, 2021 at 3:34 pm

    The angel and the devil are one

  • August 9, 2021 at 12:16 am

    Nice thought. When path is not known we should gather our thoughts first.

  • August 9, 2021 at 7:05 am

    Very nice blog theme and articles

  • August 9, 2021 at 12:13 pm

    “I should work on my light before facing him”. This shining your light on evil is a balance shift which takes the power away from evil and returns it to the good. thought provoking sentence👍

  • August 9, 2021 at 10:48 pm

    Hell and Limbo rolled into one.

  • August 10, 2021 at 1:07 am

    Hey, out of curiosity, which theme are you using?

  • August 10, 2021 at 2:14 am

    good presentation. I love it

  • Love Astrologer Abdul Kadir
    August 11, 2021 at 12:22 am

    i like this content

  • August 11, 2021 at 11:46 am

    Great story. I find it hard to believe that anyone can say they have never been in the dark even for a moment. We are always being tempted by the crafty devil. I live in the light but I am not sinless the devil is indeed crafty. Enjoyed your story. 🤗🦋Thank you.

  • August 12, 2021 at 7:55 am

    Fallen from heaven ? Enthralling.

  • August 13, 2021 at 6:00 am

    I hope you can write a book that will fill many bookstores. God bless

  • August 14, 2021 at 12:43 am

    One of these I’ll get back to fiction. Right reality is fiction enough.

  • August 15, 2021 at 8:16 am

    This is. Fire

  • August 15, 2021 at 9:28 am

    I read this as someone trapped by his alcoholism feeling like he is in Hell. I thought it was brilliant.

  • August 16, 2021 at 12:39 am

    You have such a creative mind, and such a way with words!

  • August 16, 2021 at 7:07 am

    I like the animated photo for this blog post you did. Looks interesting.

  • August 16, 2021 at 7:59 am

    You inspired me to write The similarity in comparison is the difference I’ll tell you the reason some other time.

  • August 17, 2021 at 7:32 pm

    Lovely story, lovely blog.

  • August 18, 2021 at 3:58 am

    Wow amazing 💞😍

  • August 20, 2021 at 10:14 am

    This is a fascinating story about the devil. The devil operates on the truth, but he uses it to his advantage…whether pulling a surprise visit at a bar, or through operation of “the grace of his light”, which is deceptively positive…Your artwork is very revealing in that the detail could be instrumental in contacts through the occult…
    and thanks for your compliments on my poetry.

  • August 20, 2021 at 8:33 pm

    Excellent Sebastian. tension throughout.. Does he get free or take the Devil’s place, We’ll never know.
    Hugs

  • August 21, 2021 at 10:13 am

    I loved this story, Sebastian. It had me hooked from the start. You create tension very well and keep the reader wanting to learn more. Terrific stuff and right down my alley!

  • August 21, 2021 at 2:40 pm

    Very good story.

  • August 22, 2021 at 7:20 am

    Sick. The guy was on drugs, and he just killed a man. The devil’s pawn. Good writing, but could be a scary influence on some… uhhh… here is something on my blog… https://johnnysblogcabin.wordpress.com/2021/08/21/driving-on-this-imagination-highway-to-that-state-of-understanding/

  • August 22, 2021 at 9:37 am

    I love your interjection between light and dark, vs the struggle between good and ultimately the bad. In addition… the way you bring the intrinsic decisons we make in life to fore, as being consequential.

  • August 23, 2021 at 1:13 am

    Glad I found you!

  • August 23, 2021 at 10:41 pm

    Dear Sebastian, Interesting Narrative

  • August 24, 2021 at 5:59 am

    Alice in wonderland COOLCOOL

  • August 25, 2021 at 1:53 am

    Great read! Something that I encounter quite often within my head spoken to the T. What’s true is the devil works through us all, we all sin, we all have our bad moments, too many people stick to the old testaments sins but the new testaments about forgiving all and forgiving yourself. God forgives all, and we can fight no matter what. We all have our own journey, none of us are perfect, but we all our learning in our own time. One day at a time. We are where we individually need to be on our journey, stop stressing about what you cannot fix and look towards what you are actively receiving, building, growing or becoming.

  • August 26, 2021 at 9:20 am

    This one is really delightful and amazingg..😊💥
    And thank you so much for constantly reading and liking my blogs!!😊

  • August 26, 2021 at 12:24 pm

    Enjoyed this story! Love your style of writing. it brought to mind ideas I have had about luciferian light, how it is an illusion that he is the source. He steals it from God’s image bearers, and he gets it when we succumb to his lures. When our internal light dims, we see his light and foolishly seek it from him, or steal it from others. Check out the Cherokee legend of Raven Mockers.

  • August 27, 2021 at 11:10 pm

    Certainly thught provoking…

  • August 28, 2021 at 6:22 am

    Thank you for reading my blogs . Read yours .Good stuff

  • September 1, 2021 at 11:37 pm

    Wow. This describes so many points in life when solving a crisis seems impossible. But like I’ve told my kids, “Be a river. The river doesn’t stop for a boulder. It finds a way around it. And eventually, the river wears it down until it’s just a stone.”

  • September 2, 2021 at 12:35 am

    This is deep

  • September 2, 2021 at 10:06 am

    I was captivated by the thoughts embodied in the article. I think I have to read it several more times to sort everything out. Very nice piece of work. Thank you for taking the time to read my blogs. Have a great day.

  • September 7, 2021 at 12:40 pm

    My first time reading, and simply am captivated. Looking forward to read the rest.

  • September 7, 2021 at 1:39 pm

    I feel like I discovered this story at the right time. Profound, inspirational, and beautiful.

  • September 7, 2021 at 2:09 pm

    This is amazing, you’re really gifted sir. You explained the struggle of man with the devil and how we all seem to kinda understand God’s will but find it hard to accept Him still clinging to the devil’s way even though we know it’s a dead end! Very powerful.

    More grace in Jesus name. Amen 🔥

  • October 25, 2021 at 1:46 am

    But with ideas you can steer reality💫

  • October 25, 2021 at 8:10 pm

    Nice work, Sebastian. Thanks for your like on my post about film noir.

  • October 27, 2021 at 8:58 pm

    Sabastian, are you an artist, photographer, Videographer?

  • November 4, 2021 at 4:32 pm

    Eres bien chingón, amigo.

  • November 17, 2021 at 5:46 pm

    I love the places your writing takes me …. Deep inner thoughts

  • February 24, 2022 at 5:57 pm

    magnificent post, very informative. I wonder why the opposite experts of this sector do not notice this. You should continue your writing. I’m confident, you have a huge readers’ base already!

  • Domeny Internetowe
    May 11, 2022 at 12:56 am

    My sister saved this website for me and I have been reading through it for the past several hours. This is really going to assist me and my friends for our class project. By the way, I like the way you write.

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    The Andes' highlands served as a source of inspiration for this short story. I hope you'll find the same beauty and wonder in its words that I did while crafting it.
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